Since y'all liked last week's excerpt from my historical fantasy WIP, Wolf & Huntress, so much, I figured I'd give you a little more from the first chapter. Cass Macdonald, our heroine and point-of-view character, is being forcibly restrained from going to her sister's aid in a fight. As I mentioned last week, she's just discovered she can hear werewolf telepathy, though she has no idea such a thing should be possible (it's an extremely rare ability in this world, maybe one or two people per generation) and doesn't understand why she has such a strong sense of this particular enemy's intentions:
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Mary’s head rolled to the side, and for a second the sisters’ eyes met. Then the light of life died, and Mary’s eyes went still and empty as glass.
The wolf raised his head, dripping with gore. Your turn.
Cass swallowed down her grief and shock, breathing hard. Revenge first, then mourning.
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Oh so dark but intriguing
ReplyDeleteThis is very interesting. It leaves me with a lot of questions and I'll have to come back to find the answers. Well done.
ReplyDeleteYikes! Intriguing and suspenseful. Good job.
ReplyDeleteNicely done. Spare, but conveys everything it needs to!
ReplyDeleteSounds like a challenge she is up to- great 6
ReplyDeleteDawne P
So suspenseful and well done!
ReplyDeleteI love the whole premise and I can't wait to read more next week. Great 6.
ReplyDeleteGreat snippet!
ReplyDeleteI love the dark influence. That she can hear her enemy's thoghts, is a great touch
ReplyDeleteOh dear! I actually brought a hand upon my stomach when reading this, so much it was vivid. Good one!
ReplyDeleteLoved the six. Go get them Cass
ReplyDeleteGreat six! You didn't need to give tons of gory details to paint a picture.
ReplyDeleteGreat six. I always love to see how death is portrayed vividly and simply!
ReplyDeleteI love the simple impact of these lines. Revenge, then mourning is the right sequence!
ReplyDeleteGreat six! I have a feeling that wolf will wish he didn't mess with Cass.
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Joyce
http://joycelansky.blogspot.com
That's a very powerful six. I also really like her determination in the last line.
ReplyDeleteI'm just hoping you keep sharing six sentences from this book every week. You've got my attention.
ReplyDeleteThe intensity is fantastic. I want to go kick someone's ass now for her.
ReplyDeleteVery intriguing! Leaves me with that sitting on the edge of my seat feeling. Wishing I could turn the page and find out what happens next!
ReplyDeleteOoh, chilling! I want to read more!
ReplyDeleteI really like "light of life died." Very descriptive. I'm enjoying your six sentences every week!
ReplyDeleteNice and leaves tons of questions!
ReplyDeleteMade me feel sad for her. I hope she gets revenge.
ReplyDeleteReally, really powerful six! So intense. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThat wolf is going to be looking for his teeth in about ten seconds. Her sister died and he's threatening her? I hope she keeps his skin as a rug.
ReplyDeleteGreat six!
That's horrible. Good writing (as always) but gut wrenching.
ReplyDeleteWhat a horrible situation. I hope she gets her revenge.
ReplyDeleteI agree, this leaves a lot of questions! Can't wait to turn the page. HURRY SUNDAY!
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