Sunday, October 28, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday 10-28-12 - An Infamous Marriage

Just one more week now till release day! In this week's excerpt, Jack has just tried to convince insecure Elizabeth that he really does want her, because certain indications of male desire are difficult to fake. She almost accepts this, then points out that plenty of marriages that are far from love matches manage to produce heirs. He replies that those men probably bed their wives in the dark, the better to imagine themselves with someone else, but that's not what he wants with her:


“Oh.” She wished her face didn’t feel so hot, or that at least she could get her breathing to slow down to its normal rhythm. 
“With you,” he continued, “I want daylight, or at least candles burning. So I can see you, and know you see me.” 
“Oh,” she said again, and turned her head to look outside the window. She couldn’t seem to summon any better eloquence than that, just then.


I'm at the Emerald City Writers Conference this weekend, so I'll be late responding to any comments. But please do let me know what you think, and stop by the Six Sentence Sunday website to view other writers' excerpts.

10 comments:

  1. Rendered her speechless with that image, didn't he?

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  2. I like what he says to her, and I can see why she responds by saying "Oh." He's straight and makes his point. Wonder if she really wants him too? Fun six!

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  3. Nice showing of her emotions and physical reactions.

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  4. That was a very sweet thing for him to say. I loved her response! Great 6 :)

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  5. "Oh" kinda says it all in this situation - I can really feel her emotions - terrific six. This is on my TBR list for sure.

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  6. Sometimes, 'Oh' is just all you can come up with. Love her eloquence. :)

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  7. I like how he has reduced her to an inability to speak by stating his intentions. great six.

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  8. Loved this! Definitely want to read this one!

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