Sunday, April 3, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday revisits A Marriage of Inconvenience

This week we're back in my April 11 release, A Marriage of Inconvenience. Last week we saw the hero, James, through his sister's eyes, and this week James gives us his perspective on Lucy, the heroine. (This is from a bit earlier in the story, before James and Lucy are engaged.)

“So, brother,” she said with unconvincing casualness, “what’s the trouble between you and Miss Jones?”

“Nothing,” he said. “She’s a very sweet girl.” Now, that was damning with faint praise. The more he knew Lucy Jones, the less he would describe her as anything so insipid as “sweet.” No, her flavor was sharp and complex, with the faint bitterness of fine wine.

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24 comments:

  1. great six! I love his thoughts on Lucy!

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  2. Really liked the last line!

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  3. "...her flavor was sharp and complex, with the faint bitterness of fine wine." Wonderful description!

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  4. Ooh, what a lovely description. Great lines!

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  5. It must be something to do with the name ;)

    Great six!

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  6. Yes, the last line about "her flavor" is a wonderful extension of the metaphor! Great job!

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  7. I hate to jump on the bandwagon, but I also like the wine metaphor.

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  8. Yup, add me to the list on loving the wine metaphor. Great six!

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  9. Excellent description of her. "Sweet" really is a bland description for someone, isn't it?

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  10. Wonderful description. Gives us insight into both their characters.

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  11. Oh, that last line just wraps his description up in a bow!

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  12. Great description of character through his thoughts! :)

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  13. Fantastic description here. Congrats on the upcoming release!

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  14. Good description and effective metaphor!

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  15. Oh, I love this. The sarcasm and biting description!! Great. You know what else? As much as I did the title,when I read this I immediately thought there should be a whole book titled "The Trrouble with Miss Jones." LOL. Great six.

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  16. Loved the description in that last line.

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  17. Love how he drescribes her! Gives a lot of great insight into her character!

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  18. That is just perfect! Thanks for sharing.

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  19. "No, her flavor was sharp and complex, with the faint bitterness of fine wine." Great line. Love how he thinks of her.

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